A Dash of Style/ Latoya Rhodes

Well, it is the end of the book. The end was my favorite part of the whole book. Why? Because he let us know what marks we can not really use, and the ones to use sparingly. Well for my last exercise, I think that I am going to write something that most writers, or readers, or what Lukeman calls "amateur" writing. Also, I am going to use some of the lines from the book that I would like to call them "amateur no nos"

Here goes:

Did I kill my wife? Will I be caught? Will others find out that I did it!? What provoked me to do such a thing? Just watching her body upon the floor - she's draped with blood. Oh, I'm sick to my stomach. At this moment I wish that I could turn back the hands of time, and bring her back. I'M SORRY!!! I'm sorry. Should I run? Should I hide? I have no where to go [He turns to walk toward the body. He longs to embrace her. To kiss her face, but he is to afraid to go the marks of death on his hands. His eyes are in a gaze. Tears run down his face. He whispers...] I love you honey [He walks out the door].

The End

Thoughts:

Yea, I can see why those are not supposed to be used often. It is funny because when you read the story, it really sounds like a melodrama... a really bad melodrama! I am proud to say that I wrote this horrifying piece. It was actually kind of fun.