Lukeman 2 | Keisha McGovern

In my writings I have found that I do not use dashes or parentheses really in my last few writings. I have discovered that I need to make my writings richer and actually use these techniques to make my writings stand out. I need to be more aware of what I am putting into my writings and make them more broad and make the reader want to read what I have to say.So down below is one of my first writings , with no dashes or parentheses, then below that I tried adding in some.

well the other day when i was outside walking to the school, there was this couple sitting close to me kissing the whole time. Now i was thinking really cant you take this somewhere else. It made me laugh and just shake my head. The couple did this for like an hour, everytime i would look up there they were still attached at the hip and lips. What an exciting day, it was hot outside with a little breeze and i was just sitting there by the trees and wondering will these two ever give up. well that is all i have for now on this subject i will be back to ellaborate a little more.

Well the other day when I was outside walking to the school, there was this couple sitting close to me kissing the whole time. Now I was thinking, " really can't you take this somewhere else."It made me laugh and just shake my head. The couple did this for like and hout, everytime I would look up there they were still attached at the hip and lips. What an exciting day, it was hot outside- with little breeze- and I was just sitting there by the trees and wondering will these tow ever give up. Well that is all I have for now on this subject I will be back to ellaborate a little more later.