Lukeman Excercise Part Two | Brian Wall

In this paragraph I tried adding some parenthesis and dashes as an experiment to see the effect on my writing.

Dark clouds rolled forebodingly above the pine encrusted hills. An unforgiving, bitter cold wind rushed down over the rocky ledges – winter had come in strong this year -- and stung the young boy’s face. Surely another winter blizzard was eminent. He slowly pushed aside one of the pine boughs (which the wind was blowing repeatedly in his face) and attempted to get a better view of the surrounding. Trying not to knock the snow from the branch, he gazed intently in the direction from whence he had come. His hands were turning red from the cold and began to throb – they were already wet from the trek he had made thus far through the snow -- as he tightly gripped the rough bark trunk. Shifting his feet on the slick branch twenty feet in the air, he shrunk farther into the branches to keep himself from view, while peering through the long needles toward the ground.

I very rarely, if ever, use parenthesis and dashes. I think that by introducing these marks into my work, it gives more detail into what exactly is going on in the scene. It gives more information that may help the reader better understand the position and circumstances of the character. I believe that I will now use more dashes and parenthesis to add a new aspect to my writing.