Lukeman Exercise Part One | Tawn Jewkes

This is the original version. It probably doesn't make sense at all because it's just a chunk out of a story. The punctuation isn't horrible, but I found inserting and removing a few punctuation marks here and there made it easier to read. I also found that the flow was better and it seemed to be less choppy and jump from sentence to sentence.

I am not a morning person, definitely not a morning person. I showered quickly like I had to most every morning because I always sleep in. I threw on a little eye make-up because wearing anything more than that is such a waste of time and then slicked my hair into a bun. Jeans and a school t-shirt was what I wore that day—in other words, my scrounge clothes. I had to eat breakfast on the go.

Considering it took me twenty minutes to drive to school every day I had plenty of time to put lotion on and finish up all the little touches I didn’t have time to do because I never woke up early enough.

This is the revised version.

I am not a morning person, definitely not a morning person. I showered quickly like I had to most every morning because I always sleep in. I threw on a little eye make-up because wearing anything more than that is such a waste of time and then slicked my hair into a bun. Jeans and a school t-shirt was what I wore that day—in other words, my scrounge clothes. I had to have breakfast on the go.

Considering it took me twenty minutes to drive to school every day I had plenty of time to put lotion on and finish up all the little touches I didn’t have time to do because I never woke up early enough.

Just revising a few sentences changed it enough to give it a better flow. It helped with the overall understanding and made it more simple and straightforward.