Lukeman Exercise 2, Megan

I decided to take a dialogue where a break was needed and fix it by adding "he said". I think by adding the break it helped portray the intensity of the situation, and the intensity building between the three friends. I'm sure there is always a need to apply the technique elsewhere in work, but I think I do a pretty good job with it--usually.

Original:
"Why do you always have to be so stubborn? Why can't you just listen to me and do what I say?"
"Sorry, Chris, but not everyone believes you are right all the time. Is it so hard for you to accept that maybe I'm doing things the right way?" Jill asked, obviously very annoyed.
"I'm older than you Jill. I know how best to handle the situation. You should just listen to me."
"Why? You know Jill does have a good point. Her way would make it easier to get across. Maybe we should try it."
"Oh so now you're taking her side. Why? Because she's pretty? Because you like her better? Because you've been in love with her since the fourth grade?"
"Hey Chris, back off. Her idea just seems to make more sense. Is it really such a big deal if we try her idea instead of yours?"
"Yeah it's a big deal. We only have time to try one idea. I don't want to die simply because you want to make your girlfriend feel better."
"Look, Chris is right. We only have time for one so let's stop arguing and get to it. Chris, you win. My idea was stupid-let's try yours."


Technique Applied:
"Why do you always have to be so stubborn? Why can't you just listen to me and do what I say?"
"Sorry, Chris, but not everyone believes you are right all the time. Is it so hard for you to accept that maybe I'm doing things the right way?" Jill asked, obviously very annoyed.
"I'm older than you Jill. I know how best to handle the situation. You should just listen to me."
"Why?" Eric interjected. "You know Jill does have a good point. Her way would make it easier to get across. Maybe we should try it."
"Oh so now you're taking her side," Chris said defensively, giving Eric a betrayed look. "Why? Because she's pretty? Because you like her better? Because you've been in love with her since the fourth grade?"
"Hey Chris, back off. Her idea just seems to make more sense. Is it really such a big deal if we try her idea instead of yours?" Eric defensively replied.
"Yeah it's a big deal. We only have time to try one idea. I don't want to die simply because you want to make your girlfriend feel better."
"Look, Chris is right. We only have time for one so let's stop arguing and get to it," Jill admitted hastily. She had just realized how much the water had come up in the short time they had been arguing. "Chris, you win. My idea was stupid-let's try yours."