Lukeman exercise part two | Kimberly Bennett

So, first I thought I would add a colon to make an ending statement more profound. I chose a paragraph from the story I did my public reading on that I didn't have a chance to read. It went as follows.
I would eventually come to find out that there was a chosen one and that this little incident was really a reflection on my companion’s people skills, not his sanity. But the problem is this. I am not the chosen one. And I never was.

I changed it to this:

I would eventually come to find out that there was a chosen one and that this little incident was really a reflection on my companion’s people skills, not his sanity. But, there is a problem. I am not the chosen one: I never was.

Though interesting, I can't decide if I want the sentence break there to strike a friendlier tone or not. I feel on the one hand, having the colon makes a big impression. It says that the fact that this girl is not the chosen one is a big deal. But I feel it adds a more serious implication than I want the tone of the story to have. It is a comedy. I guess more appropriately it is a "dramady", a situation in which the drama is built up through nuances and character development in the face of a somewhat rediculous situation. Having "And I never was," as a new sentence makes it seem more thrown out as a "by the way, this is going to be interesting". A colon seems to explain the gravity of the situation. Which, maybe is what I want. A brief moment of complete seriousness amidst the comady.
I'm not sure, I'll have to think on it some more. I just never would have thought of it before.