Lukeman Part 2 | Chase Ferguson

After reading the section titled "The Colon", I decided to perform a colonoscopy on some of my writing. It really wasn't that messy. I did learn something though, along with my stupidity. I never knew colons could be used other then for list. So heres a paragraph from one of my childhood stories titled, "Accident in the Rafters".

Before:

I remember one particular morning very distinctly. Our family had been invited to go to Lake Powell with the doctor my mother worked for. This would be the first time I would travel to these waters. Even as young as I was, I had heard the exiting stories of the great reservoir. I remember being more excited about the doctor’s house boat then the actual lake. We would soon be departing to Lake Powell. This morning in the rafters was a bit different when my brother decided to join me.

After:

I remember one particular morning very distinctly. Our family had been invited to go to Lake Powell with the doctor my mother worked for. This would be the first time I would travel to these waters. Even as young as I was, I had heard the exiting stories of the great reservoir. I remember being more excited about the doctor’s house boat then the actual lake. We would soon be departing to Lake Powell. This morning in the rafters was a bit different: my brother had joined me.

I really enjoy the last sentence of the paragraph with the colon added. I mean everyone needs a colon! Ok not everyone, at least not when writing. But the placement of this colon in this writing seems to give me the flag that I wanted and missed the first go around.